Wednesday Write-In #57

This week’s words were:

end of an era  ::  peanuts  ::  claustrophobia  ::  spore  ::  fizzy

 

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The Glamour Girl

They’d talked until dawn set fire to the horizon.

Much later, he woke to a gentle hsss. It took him several minutes to understand that he was listening to the dregs of their forgotten champagne, bubbling their last. He threw the fizzy liquid back, its slightly sour note wrinkling his palate.

He remembered.

Her skin, like a fresh snowfall. Her lips, red as death.

‘Let’s open a window,’ he’d suggested, but she’d just widened those famous eyes. Her fingers, heavy with jewels, had pulled her robe tighter around her neck.

‘No,’ she’d whispered. ‘I just… I can’t deal with the cold. You understand, don’t you?’

He’d dropped his hand from the window latch, then, and heaved a sigh, stirring up the dust particles in this claustrophobic, unwashed room.

‘Come and sit by me, darling,’ she’d said, with a smile, seeing his frustration. ‘Let’s talk about the good old days.’

‘The days of getting paid peanuts and being worked like a horse, you mean?’ He’d laughed joylessly and slid into the hollow of her body. She’d settled around him like a cat, curling herself into his warmth.

‘But they were fun, weren’t they?’ she’d said, her voice distant. ‘Even so?’

He’d let his hand fall to stroke her narrow back, realising as he did so that he could trace each one of her bones. She was like a puzzle, badly made. His hand had stilled.

‘Fun? I suppose,’ he’d murmured. Perhaps, if you were the star.

‘They loved me then, didn’t they?’ she’d asked, tilting her head back. He’d felt her breath on his face as she spoke, warm and sickly, like a spore-filled breeze. In his mind, she’d started seeding and taking root in him, all over him, and his bile had risen.

‘What’s the matter?’ she’d asked, a frown beginning. ‘Do I… Is it how I look? What?’

‘You’re every bit as lovely now as you’ve ever been,’ he’d told her, trying to smile. Her frown had deepened at his words, and her lips had thinned. He felt like he’d said the wrong thing, but he didn’t know what.

Her eyes, like sloe berries. Her hair, bright as life.

His head pounded.

He looked around, searching. He called her name, softly and then with more force. He stumbled upright, scanning the detritus of the night they’d spent together; she was not on the bed, nor on the couch. She was not singing in the kitchen.

It took him several long moments to think of checking the marble- and gold-fitted bathroom, but when he did, he marvelled, for a moment, at how neat she looked. Then, he heaved up his champagne, his ears still hissing, his brain strangled.

He gasped for breath, already seeing tomorrow’s headlines in his mind. They’d likely call it ‘the end of an era’, ‘the death of a goddess.’

Gently, he lifted her to the bed, settling her robe decently around her. He rouged her face and combed her hair, and while the police were on their way he cleaned out the tub.

As the first bulb flashed, he thought her pale, tired face bore the faint trace of a smile.

 

10 thoughts on “Wednesday Write-In #57

  1. patrickprinsloo

    It’s beautifully written and very sad even though I don’t get the ending completely. Was it suicide? Aided? Cut wrist? A pact?
    Great description of her. Skin, lips, hair, eyes.

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    1. SJ O'Hart Post author

      Thanks, Patrick. Yes, I think she commits suicide at the end, and he makes her look beautiful for her last ‘appearance’, because he knows it’s what she would’ve wanted him to do. Thanks for reading, and commenting. 🙂

      Reply
  2. Elaine Peters

    Beautiful descriptions from ‘dawn set fire to the horizon’ all the way through. Sad though. The death of a diva.

    Reply
  3. emmaleene

    Love the writing too! Very rich descriptions- the description of her was very vivid but I especially love the description of him drinking the champagne “wrinkled the palette” spot on- I could taste it. I got confused about whether he murdered her or it was suicide but figured out it was suicide when I read again. I think it was the line about him cleaning out the bath while he waited for police- I wasn’t sure if he was hiding evidence or preserving her dignity. Shuffling around a word here/there will sort that out! Really enjoyed reading such beautiful writing-well done!

    Reply
    1. SJ O'Hart Post author

      Hi Emmaleene – thanks for your comments. Yep, you’re spot on about the ‘dignity’ thing re. cleaning out the bath. Sorry the end caused so much confusion; I guess I was going for an arthouse-noir-indirect sort of vibe, but missed the target a bit. 😀

      Am glad you enjoyed the story, anyway. 🙂

      Reply
  4. highinbrixham

    Another great piece of writing. The descriptions are so evocative, and so cleverly worded. ‘She was like a puzzle, badly made’ – great stuff! You also manage to weave in so many different senses. From ‘slightly sour note’, to ‘skin fresh as snowfall’, you quietly build our unease/sense of death.
    It’s funny how ‘the end of an era’ seems to evoke the early to mid twentieth century – it did for me, too. Somehow we don’t seem to have eras any more!

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